Honest opinions please

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I’m tired of crying for you
I’m tired of crying cuz of u
I’m tired of feeling like I’m dying cuz the loneliness is killing me
I’m tired of trying to be better
I’m tired of trying to hold it together when it all falls apart anyway so how does that make it better
I’m tired of being strong
I’m tired of being smart
im tired of being alone
I’m tired of being me
I’m tired of this fighting
I’m tired of believing cuz in the end it never really turns out
I’m tired of life
I’m tired of death
I’m tired of being hungry
I only wanted what was best
I’m tired of feeling angry
I’m tired of feeling hostile
I’m tired of feeling like this life is impossible
I’m tired of feeling guarded
I’m tired of feeling jaded
I’m tired of feeling like I’m so fucking hated
I’m tired of this struggle
I’m tired of the hustle
I’m tired of fake friends acting like they know me
I’m tired of people who act but actually never gave a fuck
I’m tired of the game
I’m tired of feeling pain
I’m tired of people looking at me like I’m the one insane
I’m tired of wishing I could die
I’m tired of wishing I could live
If you are listening god help me cuz I’m just too fucking tired

I’ve been working on this for a week. Please tell me what you think.

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I like it and it makes sense to me. I’d rather see “cause” or “because” instead of “cuz”. Just seeing it written looks better in my opinion. But otherwise great work!

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Makes sense. I started writing at work so had to write it down fast. Thanks for the input. And thanks for reading it.

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I liked it. I enjoy a bit of poetry but not as much as reading someone’s heart.

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Thank you. That’s awesome.

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I like it. The repetition of “I’m tired of” speaks to me (I’ve been there too). I agree with the “cuz” to “because” comment above. Other than that I liked it!

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It’s yours you own that shit my friend

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When im tired i go to bed , LOL

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Lol you would think so but to be honest I’m tired of being tired

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I almost can hear it as song in my mind.

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It’s good that you’ve been able to express so many feelings here, so much ache and pain.
I think you might consider reducing the repetition “I’m tired…” so it could start a series of 5 or 6

What do you think?

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“own that shit my friend”
Yes! So right!

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Thanks thats kind of what it started evolving into. Definitely have a lot more work to do on it

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I like that idea. I’m going to try it out and see how it works.

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Most of them yes. Some of them like the situation with my wife I can only do so much on my own. She doesn’t see there is a deeper problem than what’s on the surface. If that makes sense to you.

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I am super excited that patrons and people with time in sobriety have read this and understand where I’m coming from. People in my very small circle of family and friends say I need to consider writing on a regular basis. I think I hold myself back from that because I personally feel like I’ve got nothing if interest to say. Maybe after seeing these replies i couldn’t be more wrong.

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Exactly! Keep creating, keep experimenting. You’ll be glad you did :innocent:

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I’m just sick and tired of being sick and tired…